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Posted by margo roby on 20/07/2011 in exercises, poetry, writing
Tags: creative exercises, poems, poetry, prompts, We Write Poems, Writing Exercises
20/07/2011 at 11:18 am
I like what you’ve done!
20/07/2011 at 12:16 pm
Wow! That was quick, Annell. I just finished breakfast 🙂 And, thank you.
20/07/2011 at 1:37 pm
Wonderful imagery, Margo. You’ve painted a vivid picture with your words.
20/07/2011 at 9:14 pm
Thank you, Pamela. I am fascinated with these wasps [don’t ask].
20/07/2011 at 3:50 pm
imaginative use of prompt (and of course dictionary) I wonder if potter wasps are what we used to call mason wasps in Seychelles. They use to carry lumps of mud in through the louvred windows and construct elaborate nexts on the inside of the curtains. This was a good prompt, and I think it stretched us all.
20/07/2011 at 9:34 pm
It was a good prompt, Viv. It put me outside of my comfort zone enough to know I should do this again. I think potter and mason wasps are the same. I find them fascinating. Odd what takes our fancies.
20/07/2011 at 4:28 pm
Perfect form for this piece… lovely use of these new words. Thanks!
20/07/2011 at 9:15 pm
Thank you, Laurie. You made me smile.
Sharp Little Pencil
20/07/2011 at 5:24 pm
Margo, you are a brave soul, using new words for the sake of learning them. I try to learn a new thing every day, and will try this method as well. It may not make it into my poetry, but…
The form, from the longer, frantically busy lines, down to the simplicity of the final words, was brilliant. I think you did the prompt proud. Thanks, Margo. Peace, Amy
20/07/2011 at 9:20 pm
I was leery of this at first, Amy. But once the words pointed to a poem, it worked, because then I looked for new words that connected.
And thank you for your always kind and supportive comments.
20/07/2011 at 7:41 pm
Margo, love that you used the prompt to revisit an older poem. I did something similar with mine, only on the idea/concept level. I remembered one of the first poems I had written for an assignment on alliteration and how much fun I had looking for words in the dictionary to fill out the piece. So did it again, and had fun while doing it. I like the images in your poem, and how the movement of the first stanza slows to stillness along with the potter wasps.
20/07/2011 at 9:27 pm
Elizabeth, I almost didn’t make this prompt [my brain was not being helpful], although I love the idea. Once I had a direction, finding words I didn’t know that connected was fun. I love dictionaries.
20/07/2011 at 9:00 pm
Insects always have the greatest use-names… wasps doing pottery. What next! But I like the way you characterized them.
20/07/2011 at 9:23 pm
Joseph! I was just wondering where you were. I love insect names. And the nests this one builds look like mud pots at an archaeological dig. What next, indeed!
20/07/2011 at 10:32 pm
“Vestiary” and “coronach” are new to me. I always appreciate finding little treasures like these. Thanks!
20/07/2011 at 10:41 pm
You are welcome, mmt. Happy to add treasures!
20/07/2011 at 10:37 pm
I like the way this reduced… like the final turns of a potter’s wheel, this turn, that last turn, done.
20/07/2011 at 10:40 pm
Nice description, Nan! Thank you.
21/07/2011 at 5:38 am
This is a wonderful poem. I love your new words.
21/07/2011 at 11:23 am
Thank you, Tilly!
21/07/2011 at 7:45 am
Bzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz. They are ferocious little guardians that send people screaming and flailing their arms. 🙂 I like the informative nature of the piece, and your great new words.
21/07/2011 at 11:26 am
Thanks, Brenda. It was fun to write of them apart from their effect on people!
21/07/2011 at 9:13 am
I think this is marvellous, Margo. Deft use of the words definitely! I like goldenrod too.
21/07/2011 at 11:27 am
Ooooh! Love ‘deft,’ Irene. Thank you.
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