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Posted by margo roby on 29/05/2011 in exercises, poetry, writing
Tags: a wordling whirl of Sundays, creative, exercises, poem, poems, poetry, prompts, Wordle, writing, Writing Exercises
29/05/2011 at 12:06 pm
Oh how I love the lemon light of night….this is a rich piece, Margo. I’m so glad you are writing to the wordles. This falls into place like the words were meant to be ordered that way. There is no falseness forced.
29/05/2011 at 12:12 pm
Thank you, Brenda! I forgot to mention I changed yellow to lemon because my brain saw lemon from the first. I am looking forward to visiting your site and participating. Even if my brain doesn’t come up with a poem I shall visit others to read and enjoy.
anjum wasim dar
29/05/2011 at 1:21 pm
A window opens
in Heaven’s door
as angels gather
to defend,in the waning
yellow light contrasting
colors of life rearrange
for absolute srrender, a
mystic lull fills the celestial
void before the final risk
no utterance just faith and
acceptance beneath the martyrs
wait ,for the Flight to descend.
m, you have written a deeply effective poem-I tried to find a poem, hope you will review -a
29/05/2011 at 1:25 pm
I particularly like the line “contrasting/colors of life” and the final stanza. I am able to picture the whole scene. If you enjoy doing the wordles I’ll have the link every week, Anjum.
29/05/2011 at 3:05 pm
I am your student Dear Ma’am .Thank you for the appreciation.Over the years I have identified myself as a freestyle writer. I definitely achieve better results if I am more focused . I can write with given word lists , as in 3 word poetry challenges I have won distinctions but at times I do feel stressed if I have to meet a deadline but then…I guess there reside the twins-Oh Dear Ma’am I need you surely…please go ahead with the weekly link …
29/05/2011 at 4:07 pm
with the wordles
for I love words
and its only
and words are
all I have
to keep your
and keep finding
29/05/2011 at 5:33 pm
This made me smile and laugh, Anjum. Great fun.
29/05/2011 at 6:05 pm
To make You happy is one of the first
second is to make you smile
and third : to make you laugh…and enjoy what I write …
for you are a Great Friend Teacher and ..and…highly motivating literary genius , knowing the great art of creative writing…see … despite the zeeeinnggggg mosquito militants with their stinger missiles I am braving the heat…waiting for a literary poetical exchange with my great Teacher…
Thank you M for all your affectionate support.
29/05/2011 at 5:01 pm
Gorgeous, Margo. I am so happy I didn’t miss this. Instinct told me to go back, and see who else posted for last week, and there you were. Yay!
29/05/2011 at 5:32 pm
Thank you, Pamela. I will try to post a little earlier next time. I do love it when a wordle comes together and am so glad to have found this site.
29/05/2011 at 5:25 pm
This is wonderful, Margo.
“Souls are surrendered
and lives are rearranged.”
Thanks, Mary. I think those are my favourite lines.
29/05/2011 at 6:16 pm
the concept of ‘ last prayers’ is also very effective deep and realistically striking in your poem M -‘ with so many young being martyred in this strange war, poetry also has its effects-‘I wrote some lines with a title’The Last Glance’ will send you the link -soon
29/05/2011 at 10:33 pm
This poem reminds me of the movie: ‘City of Angels’ and that angels are far more present than we realise.
30/05/2011 at 1:15 am
Thank you for your comment, Elizabeth. I agree with you and like the allusion to City of Angels.
30/05/2011 at 2:43 am
I’m impressed how you’ve managed to create both a narrative and some lovely images in this poem, which is also such a straightforward and complete response to the prompt.
30/05/2011 at 9:16 am
Thank you, Matthew. It is what I like best about wordles: my brain sees the words almost in stanzas and then the idea comes. I liked this one, I confess.
30/05/2011 at 10:12 am
Margo, this is lovely. I like “angel flights gather” – that is such a striking image. Nicely structured stanzas – and that last stanza is such a beautiful ending.
30/05/2011 at 10:18 am
Thank you so much, Richard. I am wrestling with this week’s wordle, so I don’t post quite so late. I am enjoying leavening my usual writing, which can take a long time, with the wordles, which give immediate inspiration.
30/05/2011 at 11:57 am
Oh how I wish your angels would get a move on and stop all those earthly fights. Lovely use of the wordle words.
30/05/2011 at 1:32 pm
I know, Viv. They aren’t doing a whole lot of good just waiting, are they? And, thank you.
30/05/2011 at 3:18 pm
Angels above to the left to the right , all over and beneath
Ordained eternally alight in regions of sorrow and
darkness visible, in waning yellow light, gathering to protect
risk takers in desperate dangerous plight, in utter silence
surrendering, rearranging ranks multitudinous, amidst
absolute lull as vast windows extend their heavy frames
boundless from edge to edge swing wide for the host
of a hundred thousand grand, as upright they rise
on a mission to end the horrible futile earthly fight
to begin their final move , the long awaited sacred flight
04/06/2011 at 12:22 pm
Angels elsewhere and here. Life would not be the same without them. Your descriptive words play on one another and give meaning to something more. Nicely written.
04/06/2011 at 1:54 pm
There is something special about angels, isn’t there? I, like you, have an eclectic belief system, but they all seem to include angels. Thank you, Renee, for your kind words.
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