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Big Tent: Just Another Act

04 Mar

The Big Tent‘s challenge this week was to write a poem with this Wordle and the three phrases below.

“Say more,” “There is also the matter of ____” and “He started by _____.” Feeling up to an additional challenge? Use the Wordle words and one of the phrases. A bonus week. A double dare, if you will.

Say More

He started by throwing
a boyish smile her way
when she flashed her thigh
parading a question.

There is also the matter of
the flame she left in her wake
a typical tangle of tongues
gasping the question.

I could say more about
the boyish smile thrown
in the wake of the flame
to slip in a question.

He started to say more
to defy the tangle but
there is also the matter of
answering the question.

 
29 Comments

Posted by on 04/03/2011 in exercises, poetry, writing

 

29 responses to “Big Tent: Just Another Act

  1. Linda Jacobs

    04/03/2011 at 12:20 pm

    I like this! “Parading a question” is a cool line and I like how you repeat the idea of the question all the way through.

     
    • margo roby

      04/03/2011 at 12:33 pm

      Thanks, Linda. I had fun when the brain started working with this.

       
  2. vivinfrance

    04/03/2011 at 12:28 pm

    You managed to intrigue me and finish leaving me wanting more.

     
  3. pamela

    04/03/2011 at 1:50 pm

    This is intriguing Margo, it seems these words sent many people into a seductive mode. When i first saw them, I thought they seemed so ordinary. Nice job.
    btw I am still working on the conversation poem and will
    posting today or tomorrow.

    Pamela

     
    • margo roby

      04/03/2011 at 2:12 pm

      Thanks, Pamela [Pam?]. And I look forward to reading your poem.

       
  4. ravenswingpoetry

    04/03/2011 at 2:07 pm

    I liked the mystery, and the sensual suggested with the words…the gasped question which seems to be to suggest those gossiping in the background. Nicely done.

    -Nicole

     
  5. margo roby

    04/03/2011 at 2:13 pm

    Thank you, Nicole. I think I had the most fun setting up the mood.

     
  6. Mike Patrick

    04/03/2011 at 2:40 pm

    You walked me around the block and made me love it.

     
    • margo roby

      04/03/2011 at 2:52 pm

      And you made me laugh with your charming comment. Thank you.

       
  7. Laurie Kolp

    04/03/2011 at 3:06 pm

    I love the repition and rhythm in this piece.

     
    • margo roby

      04/03/2011 at 3:22 pm

      Thanks, Laurie. I enjoyed the rhythm myself and it is thanks to the phrases Big Tent gave us.

       
  8. Tumblewords

    04/03/2011 at 3:45 pm

    Love the rhythm and style of this piece!

     
  9. margo roby

    04/03/2011 at 3:58 pm

    Thank you, Sue. I’ll take this opportunity to say how much I enjoy your art.

     
  10. Donna Vorreyer

    04/03/2011 at 6:19 pm

    Like a little mini-ghazal – I like that each stanza ends with the question- all relationships are full of them.

     
    • margo roby

      04/03/2011 at 8:49 pm

      Thanks, Donna. A mini-ghazal. Hmmm. It is, isn’t it. Maybe if I look at it like that I can get over my ghazal block. My brain won’t wrap around their form but I do want to write one.

       
  11. versebender

    04/03/2011 at 8:25 pm

    Excellent effort…flow and the clever repetition. Well done. vb

     
    • margo roby

      04/03/2011 at 8:47 pm

      Thank you. I just returned from visiting your site. What fun. Love the lemon verse in particular.
      m

       
  12. nan

    04/03/2011 at 8:50 pm

    Enjoyable to read, I liked it all, but especially the last stanza. Great way to wrap up.

     
    • margo roby

      04/03/2011 at 8:53 pm

      Thank you. The last stanza gave me the most trouble, so I’m pleased it worked out.

       
  13. gautami tripathy

    05/03/2011 at 3:43 am

    Loved it all but the last stanza is very good..

    rivulets of space

    Due to Census work for the past one month, I have not been able to visit and comment. I will be back with a vengeance after a day or two!

     
  14. margo roby

    05/03/2011 at 10:22 am

    Hi Gautami! Glad to hear you will be back and with a vengeance!

     
  15. James

    06/03/2011 at 8:01 am

    Very good read. I love the image of the flame in her wake as well as the hesitation he feels at the moment of apparently wondering what next

     
  16. margo roby

    06/03/2011 at 8:06 am

    Thank you, James. With people’s comments, such as yours, I may pull the poem and work on it some more. You have given me ideas.

     
  17. Shari Smothers

    06/03/2011 at 10:43 pm

    Great poem! I could see their tangled exchange and it made me blush. Good read.

     
    • margo roby

      07/03/2011 at 11:14 pm

      Thank you, Shari! I love that the poem made you blush. It has been fun to read the different reactions and I look forward to revisiting my poem with revision in mind and everyone’s comments will help in that process.

       
  18. ms pie

    08/03/2011 at 3:57 pm

    in this case action speaks louder than words…

     
    • margo roby

      11/03/2011 at 8:47 am

      Why, thank you! That would make a good title 🙂

       
  19. Jingle

    10/03/2011 at 9:49 pm

    a boyish smile link all the words, well penned, smiles.

    http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2011/03/big-tent-poetry-in-55-words.html

    here is mine, thanks for reading.

     
  20. margo roby

    11/03/2011 at 8:41 am

    Thanks. Sorry I am so late getting to your comment but have been on Spring Break and am trying to catch up 🙂

     

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