Tuesday Tryouts: More Than a Comparison

08 Feb

8:20 am, Tuesday, 8 February, 2011 – Atlanta

Today, I would like you to do two final metaphors and, for the purpose of Thursday’s discussion of parts of speech, turn one of these pieces into a poem [unless you wrote right into one].


Describe a building as seen by a man whose son has just died in a war.
Do not mention the son, war, death, or the old man doing the seeing.

Freewrite in prose (or poetry if you have been inspired in that direction).

In order to accomplish the prompt, what did you have to do? Articulate it to yourself.

Creating a metaphor
simile: indirect comparison? metaphor: direct comparison?
NO! A metaphor provides the identification of two unlike things.
where a simile compares two things which are similar in nature.

Metaphor: from the Greek metafora: to transfer to. When using a metaphor, you are transferring the properties of one thing to another:  “Juliet is the sun”. Not Juliet is like the sun, hot, bright, yellow…but Juliet IS the sun, the centre of Romeo’s universe, the giver of life and nurture.


Describe a lake, or other natural scene, as seen by a teenager who has just killed someone.
Do not mention the person killed, death, or the teenager doing the seeing.

Freewrite in prose (or poetry if you have been inspired in that direction).

No pretty images for the post, to not interfere with your own images. I shall see you Thursday, poem in hand, ready to begin a revision process.


Posted by on 08/02/2011 in exercises, poetry, writing


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3 responses to “Tuesday Tryouts: More Than a Comparison

  1. Donna Vorreyer

    12/02/2011 at 10:40 am

    Love the building prompt. I may try that one later today.

    • margo roby

      12/02/2011 at 11:03 am

      I found that one difficult, but the body of water was fun as I imagined a young man looking at a lake after killing his mother. I liked the poem that came from it but it’s not the kind of thing that can easily find a home.


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