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Oulipoem 6: April 6 — Blank Verse Blank

06 Apr

Today will show the workings of my mind rather than a product. Everything I tried will be here. At the end, I discovered my favourite is the list of lines as I copied them from the newspaper, so I placed a stanza break every third line. The number 9 is the number of syllables in those two lines [although, in some weird way, it works with the lines]. Admittedly, I’m still not breaking enough rules.

The prompt:

Compose a poem using unintentional lines of iambic pentameter found in your newspaper.

The lines I found:

she needs a holster on her garter 9
a pocket on her gown would ruin the line
a wedding garter smart phone holster 9

you promised to repair our roof today
now bow before my iron sofa and
you want to know the real reason they

I dropped my keys outside but it’s too dark
so leave my home and go back to your grave
if I could write a zombie movie I’d

exactly as we say or we shall let
the mega-horrors of your future life
unleash the power of the female brain

your loved one was a donor, please inform
saw joy and beauty in all things she saw
the spreading of her ashes was at sea

The attempts:

I dropped my keys outside but it’s too dark
so leave my home and go back to your grave
the mega-horrors of your future life;

unleash the power of the female brain
exactly as we say, or we shall let

————————

your loved one was a donor, please inform
exactly as we say or we shall let
the mega-horrors of your future life
unleash the power of the female brain

——————–

If I could write a zombie movie, I’d
unleash the power of the female brain;
now bow before my iron sofa     and
the mega-horrors of your future life.

————————-

You want to know the real reason they
unleash the power of the female brain?

———————–

You promised to repair our roof today
exactly as we say, or we shall let
the mega-horrors of your future life
unleash the power of the female brain.

—————-
The sources:

The comics, T.V.Guide, and Obituaries of the San Francisco Chronicle 6 April 2014

 
27 Comments

Posted by on 06/04/2014 in exercises, oulipost, poems, poetry, writing

 

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27 responses to “Oulipoem 6: April 6 — Blank Verse Blank

  1. Carol Carlisle

    06/04/2014 at 1:21 pm

    Just read Doonesberry.
    You must get up early
    or get the paper the night before.
    Great challenge.
    Doubt I can count that high.

     
    • margo roby

      06/04/2014 at 1:37 pm

      I get up early. The pressure, the pressure!

       
  2. Quickly

    06/04/2014 at 1:21 pm

    mega, margo, mega

    Process is fun.

     
  3. barbcrary

    06/04/2014 at 1:46 pm

    “unleash the power of the female brain.” “Nuff said. I like you efforts here, Margo!

     
    • margo roby

      06/04/2014 at 1:50 pm

      The line seems to fit everything. As you say: ‘Nuff said.

       
  4. barbcrary

    06/04/2014 at 1:47 pm

    Or even “your” efforts, although I think I like “you,” too.

     
  5. Nilson Thomas Carroll

    06/04/2014 at 1:49 pm

    “mega-horrors” – excellent ; )

     
  6. Misky

    06/04/2014 at 2:03 pm

    I like the zombie movie!

    >

     
  7. whimsygizmo

    06/04/2014 at 5:39 pm

    I especially love this:
    “I dropped my keys outside but it’s too dark
    so leave my home and go back to your grave
    the mega-horrors of your future life;”

    NICE.

    Here’s me:

    http://whimsygizmo.wordpress.com/2014/04/06/everything-under-the-sun/

     
    • whimsygizmo

      06/04/2014 at 5:47 pm

      PS:

              Iamb now thinking in these feet of ten,
              I don’t know if I can get past this rhyth’m.
              I hope that this is not my fate for good;
              These toes are stressed and longing to be un.

              

       
      • margo roby

        06/04/2014 at 9:58 pm

        Grinning. We do, in fact, speak naturally in iambs. You’re just more aware at the moment. Love the verse.

         
    • margo roby

      06/04/2014 at 9:57 pm

      I admit, I had fun, even if I wasn’t satisfied. The lines are fun.

       
  8. Reiser Perkins

    06/04/2014 at 6:51 pm

    It’s fun seeing your process and attempts like this. I had to fight the urge to rhyme, and I’m not generally a rhymester. I think you found some nice internal rhythms, but nothing feels quite finished. I think you’re on to something with that zombie one though :)

     
    • margo roby

      06/04/2014 at 10:07 pm

      I looked for more lines for the zombie, Reiser. No luck. I may keep an eye out :-)

       
  9. Hannah Gosselin

    06/04/2014 at 8:17 pm

    I dig the same portion that De mentions most, too! :)

     
  10. sonjajohanson10

    17/04/2014 at 12:16 pm

    The meter really stands out, especially considering the quirky forms we are immersed in!

     
    • margo roby

      17/04/2014 at 12:39 pm

      Iambic I can do. The others, enh, not so much.

       

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