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Poem in Response to Wordle #44

19 Feb

Hello all. I hope wonderful Sundays are being had. I almost didn’t have a response. I forgot to copy the words when I got them, which starts my process. I’m not thrilled… but I am here.

pulled for revision

See you on my rounds, or yours.

 
50 Comments

Posted by on 19/02/2012 in exercises, poetry, writing

 

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50 responses to “Poem in Response to Wordle #44

  1. annell

    19/02/2012 at 12:29 pm

    I loved every word!

     
  2. siggiofmaine

    19/02/2012 at 12:47 pm

    This is grrreat . Love it. The Wordles are so fun to read … and this one is no exception with the metaphor tossed in for good behavior…ok, writing.

    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:41 pm

      I don’t know, Siggi. I like ‘for good behaviou’r!

       
  3. viv blake

    19/02/2012 at 12:50 pm

    But this is really good, Margo. I was expecting the worst, from your comment on my blog, and your preamble, but this is one of the best!

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:42 pm

      Thank you, ViV. I found myself reworking the poem to remove anything that sounded cliche, so this draft is much better than my previous.

      m

       
  4. wordsandthoughtspjs

    19/02/2012 at 12:56 pm

    I with Viv, Margo. This is one of the best I have read today. Nicely done.

    Pamela

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:43 pm

      Thank you, Pamela. You all are making me feel good.

      m

       
  5. JulesPaige

    19/02/2012 at 12:56 pm

    I liked how the last line pulled it all together. Ghosts like doctors – perhaps some do help to heal?

     
  6. b_y

    19/02/2012 at 1:23 pm

    I really like the bizarre/heart-searing combination.
    Don’t put it down–it’s just quiet.

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:44 pm

      Thanks, Barb. I like that. It’s quiet. I will come back to it.

      m

       
  7. Marianne

    19/02/2012 at 2:09 pm

    Great writing and a great poem, Margo! I loved the line: “where it has worn sores on my soul.”

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:45 pm

      You and I seem to like the same lines, Marianne. That’s my favourite, too.

      m

       
      • Marianne

        20/02/2012 at 8:40 am

        Thanks for the Edward Arlington Robinson link! I loved: “I was not here until you came;
        And I shall not be here when you are gone.”

         
        • margo roby

          20/02/2012 at 8:57 am

          Marianne, I know. Talk about a smack upside the head. My students found this one tough but they liked the poem.

           
  8. brenda w

    19/02/2012 at 2:40 pm

    This is beautiful, Margo. The similie comparing sores on your soul to straps digging furrows in your skin is exquisite.

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:45 pm

      Thank you. Brenda. I am happiest with that simile.

      m

       
  9. Mary

    19/02/2012 at 3:05 pm

    I didn’t wordle today. Just couldn’t find the words. I like yours, Margo. From your poem, I understand that the only way to deal with one’s ghost / ghosts is to face it / them. I concur with that. Otherwise it is up to too much mischief in those ‘dark places.’

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:47 pm

      Exactly, Mary. I like it when you tell me what you understand from what I have written. It helps a lot.

      m

       
  10. Julie Catherine

    19/02/2012 at 3:18 pm

    Wonderful poem, Margo – I also enjoyed the comparison of ‘worn sores on my soul’ with ‘straps diffing furrows into my skin’; very, very nicely worded. ~ Julie :)

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:50 pm

      Thank you, Julie! Question: Are you going to let me know when you need reminders posted for your blog? If you are completely on schedule now, I can make it a regular thing, myself.

      m

       
      • Julie Catherine

        19/02/2012 at 8:42 pm

        Hi Margo :)

        Yes, every month I will be having a ‘guest blog’ feature on the first; every month I will do a Medal of Humor post in the second week; those will be on a regular schedule – and I really appreciate your posting them for me, thank you.

        I will email you about a notice I’d like you to put in for next Thursday for a special contest. The ‘special’ stuff I will always send you an email for the week before.

        You are so kind to do these things for us, thank you!
        Julie :)

         
        • margo roby

          20/02/2012 at 9:01 am

          It is my pleasure, Julie. If you don’t see yourself in the Friday list for your regular features, yell. I may confuse the calendar. We’ll see ^–^.

           
  11. Yousei Hime

    19/02/2012 at 4:03 pm

    I like best that you never name or identify the ghost, only describe it as it pertains to you. I feel many can relate to having such ghosts.

     
    • margo roby

      19/02/2012 at 5:51 pm

      Thanks, Yousei. I was hoping that would make the poem more, rather than less, personal. Glad to hear that’s how you see it.

       
      • Yousei Hime

        19/02/2012 at 6:04 pm

        Yes, more personal for the reader, which includes the author as the reread it. Nicely done.

         
  12. Laurie Kolp

    19/02/2012 at 6:25 pm

    I love the flow of these words nestled, restless, recesses and:

    it has worn sores on my soul
    like tight straps wearing furrows
    into my skin

     
    • margo roby

      20/02/2012 at 9:05 am

      Thank you, Laurie. I am learning a lot about using sound, from Joseph Harker.

      margo

       
  13. markwindham

    19/02/2012 at 6:57 pm

    I like the idea of summoning our ghosts, facing them and what they carry.

     
    • margo roby

      20/02/2012 at 9:04 am

      Fortunately, or unfortunately, Mark, that seems to be the best way.

      m

       
  14. whimsygizmo

    19/02/2012 at 8:12 pm

    Love this. We’ve woven some similar phrases and themes with the same words, yet also very different. Love when that happens.
    Adore the phrase “redress the balance of my heart.”

     
    • margo roby

      20/02/2012 at 9:02 am

      Thank you, whimsy g. I love when that happens too. It’s such fun to come across while wandering the poems.

      margo

       
  15. Diane Belleville

    19/02/2012 at 10:26 pm

    Excellent response to the wordl, Margo.

     
  16. Irene

    20/02/2012 at 1:10 am

    The last line gave me a sweet lump.

     
    • margo roby

      20/02/2012 at 9:03 am

      Thank you, Irene. It’s a shame it can be only for a time :-)

       
  17. Tilly Bud

    20/02/2012 at 5:05 am

    A great use of the words, Margo. I loved this: worn sores on my soul

     
    • margo roby

      20/02/2012 at 8:58 am

      Thank you, Tilly Bud. It sounds painful, doesn’t it.

       
  18. Cathy

    20/02/2012 at 6:00 pm

    Very good, especially the flow of the poem

     
  19. tmhHoover

    20/02/2012 at 10:21 pm

    Here comes the straggler ghost “seeping in through the shadowy recesses”. I find that your words went where mine tried to go initially. It seems too often, if I let these writing prompts write themselves, they wander into much darker places than is comfortable. So what am I trying to say? Hmmm — that I am thankful you wrote what came to my mind. Why? Because it was nice to take a break from those heart-searing ghosts and because you wrote it so well. Also, I can see what others are writing, better than what I can see, what I am writing. Does that make any sense?

    And thanks for stopping by my place and leaving comment. I must say it took a garden full of words for me to write a piece that was not dark. I enjoyed thinking about the startled mourning dove as he lifted into flight, but I felt the moss description most closely. xo teri

     
    • margo roby

      21/02/2012 at 7:43 am

      Teri, It makes complete sense. I have writers I follow because they can articulate what I feel better than I can.
      I’m curious. What happens if you let the poem write itself then tell your brain firmly that you are now going to write what you want, and write a second poem that goes deliberately in a different direction. It might work, although I hate to think of you in those dark places :(

       
      • tmhHoover

        21/02/2012 at 9:17 am

        Margo- I am sure if I focused long enough I could stay/write into a brighter place. Taking the time to do so is another story. Isn’t that a slip of the tongue? I am not as dark as all that… like most of us I find ways to stay upbeat. Writing leaks the stuff out of me though… and it is probably why I am a bit leery of the whole writing thing. I know structure and discipline- to keep those ghosts in their place. Thanks for being so sweet- xo teri

         
  20. purplepeninportland

    20/02/2012 at 11:33 pm

    Wow! “worn sores on my soul like tight straps wearing furrows into my skin” amazing line

     
  21. Mary Mansfield

    21/02/2012 at 9:50 pm

    The images in this are so vivid, takes the reader right into the scene. I think we all have those stubborn ghosts who continue to reappear no matter how much we’d like them to nestle into the corners of our memories. Wonderfully written!

     
    • margo roby

      22/02/2012 at 9:17 am

      Thank you, Mary M. The ghosts rarely play fair, do they? I find they tend to ambush!

       
  22. Mr. Walker

    22/02/2012 at 9:10 am

    Margo, I really like how you used “whistle” to call out the ghost – a good use of that wordle word. And “straps wearing furrows” is such a great image.

    Richard

     
    • margo roby

      22/02/2012 at 9:15 am

      Richard, thank you. I like that part of the wordles, trying to integrate the words so they sound as if the poem were written that way rather than in response to a word list. I have your poem sitting open in another tab. That’s how I talk sternly to myself when I want to comment and haven’t quite gotten to it!

      margo

       

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